This looks really good, but may I get your permission to critique this? Last time I critiqued someone in the comments (in a satirical manner for an overly satirical piece) I was verbally (textually?) abused over something completely random and off topic.
If someone takes the time to critique, the least I could do is listen.
But most of the time, I don't ask for critiques because I already know what is wrong. I don't submit artwork and think it's flawless. I just don't bother fixing every last mistake because it takes time and I'd rather move on.